And hmmm. It's good...but it's a little wooden? Like, it all feels very surface. If you wanted to keep it light, maybe try writing it in JONAS 'verse? I think that'd be adorable, ahahaha!
Though, I will say, the phrase IMPRINTED ON YOU LIKE A BABY DUCKLING had me cackling.
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Date: 31 Dec 2010 08:18 (UTC)Though, I will say, the phrase IMPRINTED ON YOU LIKE A BABY DUCKLING had me cackling.